Here is my writing!
It was a bright sunny day in New York when everyone gathered at the park for the one and only free everything day! Loads of businesses would give out items for free, all you needed to do was give them something from your business. The celebration would start a three o’clock but many people were already there at 9 o’clock! The big city of New York in the background would make up more than 80% of the people there. The main reason people were here was because of The Party Room’s big offer which was one free balloon garland for nothing absolutely nothing! Some people had been camping over night here but when the festival started something bad happened….
What do you think happened? Answer in the comments!
Hi Noah,
ReplyDeleteI love free stuff! I wish we had a day like this in Auckland. I am very curious to know what happens in the story. I love how you have used details in your writing. Maybe next time try and see if you can add more punctuations.
Hi Noah - glad to see your Mum's business The Party Room featured in your story. She probably can't afford to give too may balloon garlands away though. I think there was an earthquake and the trees fell down.
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